Ghost of La Liberta

This story is a response to the Challenge posted on Friday Fictioneers, which is a weekly blog link-up led by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields at Addicted to Purple. A story inspired by the photo prompt, a beginning, middle and end in just 100 words or below, making every word count. Here goes my attempt, hope you guys like it.

Ghost of La Liberta 

the-boat-and-miss-liberty
The Prompt Image

Ohhh… Its him. It iiis him.

“Kevin!! ”

” Hey… How have you been? ”

” Am fine… How’r you? ”

” Still cursing you… ” Glen winks at him.  

” Five years… ” Kevin sighs.

” Yup… D’ya find someone? I mean you got engaged… Any news? ”

” Noooo… After you I’ve given up the thought.  Enjoying the liberty you see…? ”

” Yeah very apt.” Kevin points to the statue of liberty admired by a crowd they stood in the middle of.

“Haha yeah… And you? ”

” Am enjoying my liberty still being yours…..d’ya…..ever……ohhh let it  be…”

“What?”

“Nothing… “.


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14 comments on “Ghost of La Liberta

  1. Well, it could use some clarification. Otherwise it’s just dialogue. If you go the dialogue route to tell a story (which I like to recommend) it needs to be clearer in information.

    Example —

    ” Yup… D’ya find someone? I mean you got engaged… Any news? ”

    Could be done better this way —

    “Yup. So … did you ever get engaged?”

    ” Noooo… After you I’ve given up the thought. Enjoying the liberty you see…? ”

    This could be rendered as —

    “No. After you, I gave up. I see you’re enjoying your liberty, huh?”
    “Ah, good one.”
    “You think maybe that we … we could … oh, never mind.”

    See how it works? Now it’s clearer.

    Keep going, Shaktiki! 🙂

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